Blood and ink

I loved it! It was well writen and it looked like you knew what you were doing. I have no idea why Oboe thought it was violent, I actually didn't ...

Well I'm not going to sit here and pick out all your gramatical errors. You need a little work like everyone else. This story seemed like a first draft, you ...

I agree with Kyte about water sounding like it means sex. The story didn't make a whole lot of sense. I would enjoy it farther if you wrote more and ...

You really need to put an R rating on this story before Nate or some body gets angry with you. Just a heads up for you. If you use the ...

Well then... ok that didn't really make any sence what so ever. I did enjoy reading it though... at least until it came to an end. It was exciting I ...

It's alright, nothing special but there's not anything wrong with it that i could find (except that last paragraph is a little weird)